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Halloween stories by my students:
After School Class (Grades 4-6)
This group of 5 students are among the more advanced reading students in their classrooms. Their writing reflects their reading levels to a large degree. I have not corrected their mistakes, and these represent their first drafts.
Faked Halloween by Sam
SCR-EE-CH! There was that eerie noise again! I just had to see what it was. I opened the door and gasped! A car crashed on a haunted house! There is a red liquid coming out of the broken car. A Vampire drank it all and none was left. A green Zombie walked out of the car, followed by two Frankensteins. I screamed: "Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!" As I slamed closed the door.
After one year......
I find out that the car was actally bumping the house very slowly. And the red 'blood' was just tomato sauce. The Zombie and the Frankensteins was people covered with green painted mud. Yuck!
Don't let the fake things fool you.
Haunted House by Susan
Sally and Tom were playing basketball. Then, Sally missed a shot and it bounced off into the old haunted house which was Miss and Mr. Hin's house, but they passed away. Tom and Sally knocked on the big, ugly door. Their legs shook and they had a lump in their throat. They almost ran away, but the door creaked open. The looked around, but saw nothing.
Suddenly, Sally shrieked and was pulled inside the house. Tom shivered as he creeped into the house. Suddenly, his foot stepped on a creaky toy and froze as it made a silly sound.
"Sally?" Tom whispered as he started moving again. Suddenly, he saw it, the basketball. It was lying in the hands of a asleep ghost mummy.
Tom crept deeper into the house, hoping that the ghost mummy wouldn't wake up. When he touched the ball, it suddenly bounced out of the house! Then, he crept closer to the mummy and spotted Sally! She was chained near the mummy.
Tom freed her and they both ran out of the house, and int their house. Luckily, the ball had bounced into Tom's bedroom so he didn't worry.
From that day, they never played near the old house, and lived happily ever after. Sally also appreciated Tom's rescue. She could not have escaped without him.
Halloween Scare by Nicol
I knocked on the big, ugly door. My legs shook and I had a lump in my throat. I almost ran away, but then the door creaked opened. I saw many ghost flying in the house. Then I step foward a little bit I want to see what is in there.
Suddenly, the door closed. I want to get out. But the door locked. "Help!" I shout. But no one answered. Then I saw a pumpkin with a size of a key. I know that I need to find the key. But it is a big house. And I don't have clue. Then a paper drop from the roof. I pick it up. And I saw a sign. It said ghost are coming! If you want to find the key turn right. And go into a room with a black door. Then I thought I can't stay here forever! So I followed the direction. And I go into the room I saw the ghost are having party. Then I saw saw the key. It was hidden under a table. I ran to pick it up. And many people follow me. I ran more faster. Then I use the key to get out of there. "Finally!" I said. Then I'm back.
Scared By a Ghost by Christina
A full moon loomed over the leafless branches. Their spiny limbs reached out as if to grab Sam and William. But they kept walking... (from a sample intro)
They see a old house. then walk in. inside they step on creaky flood (floor). next they see many skeleton, and bat fly all around the house. Sam and William have many goose bumps, now. Wait! Who is in that room? Yellow lights sprit out. the ghost come out with many spider house. When ghost saw Sam and William, ghost sprit out the spider house to Sam and William. good thing is they ran out the scared (scary), old, ugly house...
More Halloween After School Class writing to continue...
Intensive English - Grade 3-4 Combined
This group of 6 students are the least advanced reading students in their classrooms. Their writing reflects their reading levels to a large degree. I have not corrected their mistakes, and these represent their first drafts.
Halloween by William
yesterday is Halloween! At 1'o cadk eveay body, go to beasroom (bathroom) cogs (?) clst (?) and grate 4 and grate 3 go to see muze (movie). bet the computre is burks (broken) os (so) we can't see muze. And we play one game. and we go to take pick, and we go to trickortreat! First we go to miss Nelon roon, she gate we a ? (William's question mark - he wanted to write "pencil sharpener" but he didn't know the vocabulary). and we go to art room. And we go to libilly. And we go to music room. And we go to I (abbr) - This is William's parentheses. And we go to dagke baeber (Dr. Brockberg's) room. And we go house. (Finally, we went home.)
Haunted House by Tiffany
Today is Halloween, I see many ghost, monster, skeleton, mumy and vampipe, I am afried! But they are afried to me too! I am a ghost.
We going to trick or treat. I thing we are very happy but is not happy. my friends has many candy, but I not has many candy, they has 10 candy, I not has 10 candy, I has 2 candy. I am very sad. Barbie walk to me. she side you not sad but I can give to you 3 candy and I have five candy, you have five candy.
Thank you!
I like HALLOWEEN!
Halloween by Kiki
Halloween is on October last day, is thursday. I like Halloween.
On Halloween I and my classmate make a jacko'lantern. My jacko'lantern has triangle eyes. circle nose and big open mouth.
We finished jacko'lantern then go to bathroom wear costume (to put on the costumes). Some studens look like vampire. some studens look like witch. some studens look like mummy. some students look like monster and ghost.
I like Halloween very much because Halloween is funny and scare! (scary)
As a side note: What Kiki shares about the various costumes is not true to fact. There were no vampires, mummies, monsters, or ghosts. There were a couple of witches but they were not scary ones. In fact, our Halloween at BCIS was not scary at all though that is part of the reason that Kiki likes Halloween.
Trick-or-Treat by Young
At school, we have a Hollaween party. first, we go to office, they give pentor our for me and clasroom. we go to liberay, artroom, grade 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, we are so happy!
Ms. Fisher said we can use candy corn make a hand of candy corn, and if you finish, you can use the sticker make a funny jack-o-lantern, I make a big nose and a small mouse (mouth). now I finish! I can glue on my candy box. I drawing so many cany and jack-o-lantern on me candy box too. now Ms. Fisher said we can go to music room to see a movie above Hollaween, but Ms. Fisher said First we play a game. the game callled "under the ground", is like we under the ground, is you running aroun the classroom, you shold under the log, but don't touch the log, if you touch the log, you can't play. the cici and tiffany is can't play, becouse they touch the log. now some one said "broed! I wan't see movie!" the teacher said "but the computer is not work. you shold wait, you can't said AAaa!" but the computer is not work, but we happy, is no sad, we like Holllaween party!
The end
To be continued...
Oh, the joys of teaching my students!
How did you like their stories?
